The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate the method and equipment used in producing cement, and how cement is then processed to create concrete for building purposes.

The first step in the cement production is to mix together limestone and clay. The two materials would pass through a crusher, producing powder. The powder would then be transferred into a mixer. After this, the materials would pass through a rotating heater, which is heated up inside. Next, the product would go into a grinder, where cement would be made. The final step is to pack the cement into bags.

Referring to concrete production, a mixture of cement (15%), water (10%), sand (25%), and gravel (50%) are poured into a concrete mixer. After mixing, the four materials would turn into concrete for building purposes.

To compare both productions, there are more steps in production of cement than in concrete. In addition, both methods included mixing mixtures together while rotating the container. However, heat is not required to produce concrete, but is needed in the production of cement.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... is to mix together limestone and clay. The two materials would pass through a crus...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ss through a crusher, producing powder. The powder would then be transferred into a...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, then, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17543859649 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58482178283 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573099415205 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0559955961 43.030603864 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.75 112.824112599 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.25 22.9334400587 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233258632907 0.215688989381 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912828206166 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117991584056 0.0843802449381 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189353858931 0.15604864568 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158151632222 0.0819641961636 193% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.17 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.4329268293 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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