During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.write a letter to this businessman. In your letter-

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
- remind him when and where you meet
- tell him what kind of job you are interested in
- say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Mr. Chopra,

It was a real pleasure to meet you on last saturday in delhi flight. Your offer regarding job opportunity came as a pleasant surprise. I have decided to pursue this opportunity further and will be happy to work with you.

As I mentioned in our conversation, I am hotel management graduate from Delhi university and currently working with Taj hotels. I am immensely enjoying my stay here in this organization. However, due to personal reasons I want to relocate to my home town, fortunately the job opening you have mentioned is quite near to my home. I am working as Marketing manager from last 7 years and will be interested to continue in similar role.

I have also attached copy of my resume for your reference and given complete background of my past experiences and achievements to give you fair idea about my strengths. I am confident that my expertise in the field of marketing will do justice to marketing head role in your organization and will contribute to accelerate further growth of chain of restaurants.

Thankyou you once again for your consideration and offering me this position in your esteemed organization. I will look forward to have great journey on this new endeavor.

Yours sincerely,
chomu singh

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Chopra, It was a real pleasure to meet you on la...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...nce and given complete background of my past experiences and achievements to give you fair idea ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... give you fair idea about my strengths. I am confident that my expertise in the f...
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Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to having'.
Suggestion: to having
...eemed organization. I will look forward to have great journey on this new endeavor. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n this new endeavor. Yours sincerely, chomu singh
^^^
Line 12, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eavor. Yours sincerely, chomu singh
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, look, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 5.60731707317 624% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01421800948 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99481819277 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 106.607317073 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620853080569 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8502241604 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1666666667 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150982217009 0.215688989381 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561119412775 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354220997944 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101534597264 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035902590406 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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