‘Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.’
Although it is sometimes thought that increased prison punishments can help reduce crime, it usually has a reverse impact. In my opinion, increasing the punishment isn’t the only solution to control the alarming crime rate and we ought to implement multiple strategies.
On the one hand, it can be argued that taking strict measures against criminal are expected to yield better results. There are some examples that support this. For instance, it was observed in Malaysia & UAE that with stricter punishments the crime rate was reduced by 50% over a period of 3 years. Also, in India during the period when Capital punishment was given for serious crimes the number of cases reported were half as compared to today. Furthermore, it is also believed that this serves as a prevention technique as it invokes fear in the mind of potential criminals and is also seen as a proactive measure to control crimes from happening.
On the other hand, research has shown that majority criminals are not scared of committing crimes due to psychological factors and it will require more interventions than just increasing the punishment. Firstly, Crimes happen due to the surroundings & the socio economic factors. Unemployment is the common issue around the world that has resulted in the increased crime rate. Administration should work on creating more job opportunities, providing access to education & skill building courses for weaker sections on the society. This is also supported from the report published by world economic forum where it was found that with investment on education and skill building the employment rates have been reduced by 80% in the developed countries resulting in a 40% reduction of crime aswell. In addition, more rehabilitation centers should be opened to avoid repeat offenders.
To conclude, I strongly believe investing in creating job opportunities and and preventive measures is much better. It will not only help save cost that is incurred to run these facilities but it will also make the society better and address this issue proactively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, so, well, for instance, in addition, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24624624625 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8888110422 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8646039209 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.466666667 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151354845443 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495193282624 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378351261963 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0945775199936 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427752657149 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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