The first chart below show how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse emissions which result from this energy use.
Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The first pie graph illustrates the information about the utilisation of energy in an average Australian family, while the discharge of greenhouse gas from the energy use is shown in the second pie chart. Overall, Australian spend most energy on heating, and the largest amount of greenhouse exhausts is generated by water heating.
First of all, Australia people primarily spend energy on heating and water heating, which account for 42% and 30% respectively. Moreover, the energy cost on other appliances constitutes 15%, more than doubled that in refrigeration 7%. Finally, the least energy is consumed by lighting and cooling with just making up 4% and 2% in total.
On the other hand, unlike the usage of energy, water heating overtakes heating, becoming the biggest producer by emitting about one-third of greenhouse gas in total. The second place is taken by other appliances, accounting for 28%, which is almost doubled of that in heating (15%) and refrigeration (14%). Furthermore, lighting and cooling remain the minimal proportion of 8% and 3% respectively.
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Essay evaluation report
The first pie graph illustrates the information about the utilisation of energy in an average Australian family,
The first pie graph illustrates the utilisation of energy in an average Australian family, //keep simpler
flaws:
1. need some comparisons, like:
The two charts demonstrate household energy usage in Australia and its contribution of greenhouse gas emission in six different categories. While up to three quarters of the consumed energy are for heating and water heating, they are only accounted for less than half of the greenhouse gas emissions.
2. At the beginning of the third paragraph, need to make it clear it is for 'greenhouse emissions'.
3. don't always use 'double', use 'twice' for varieties, like:
approximately a third of the gas comes from heating water, about twice of heating’s figure.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 170 200
No. of Characters: 860 1000
No. of Different Words: 95 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.611 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.881 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.078 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
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Hi there,
Could you please tell me how many reports will I get for my essay eventually? Two or three?
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Vickie
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, moreover, second, third, while, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 905.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32352941176 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88823529412 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570588235294 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9121665756 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.125 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 5.23603664747 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230875532331 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899802238739 0.103423049105 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0997586587845 0.0843802449381 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1582823949 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113827107638 0.0819641961636 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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