The first chart below shows how energy is used in an avarage Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make com

Essay topics:

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an avarage Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information bu selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The first given chart presents the proportion of energy consumed in an ordinary family in Australia, while the other illustrates how the greenhouse gas releases which is in the consequence of this power consumption.

A glance at the grasp reveals that heating spends the largest percentage of power, approximately two-fifths, contrast to a tiny portion of cooling but they are going up side down in gas emittions.

It is apparently seen that the rate of energy using for lighting and refregation has a resemble change in greenhouse gas emissions. The former accounts a tiny fractions (4%) and produces axactly to the double number. The latter has the same situation with the figure of 7% in using and 14% in leaking.

Another major proportion of energy consumption is water heating, which have the similar statistic in using and emission, less than a third and 32% respectively. The rest of power is used for other appliances, at 15% and this percentage increases more than a quater.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... chart presents the proportion of energy consumed in an ordinary family in Austra...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... using for lighting and refregation has a resemble change in greenhouse gas emissions. The...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'fraction'?
Suggestion: fraction
...s emissions. The former accounts a tiny fractions 4% and produces axactly to the double n...
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Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the same situation with the figure of 7% in using and 14% in leaking. Another ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, if, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 829.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05487804878 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90798685811 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628048780488 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3860262811 43.030603864 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.428571429 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.23603664747 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222702471063 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901427513311 0.103423049105 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734563846179 0.0843802449381 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123406713735 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741652466993 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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