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Essay topics:

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010.overall ,it can be seen that the percentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased,while by stream increased over the given time period.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010.overall ,it can be seen that the percentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased,while by stream increased over the given time period.

In 2011,about 55% of music were sold by CD, while at about 33 and 5 percent were sold through downloads and streams respectively From that year onwards ,the amount of CD music sold ,fell slowly reaching almost a quarter in the year 2018.

Similarly,the percentage of songs sold via downloads experienced a decline,although it stops at above 30% in 2011,the figure then rose slightly to almost 42% in the year 2014 before falling significantly to 30percent at the end of the year.

On the other hand; the rate of songs sold via streams continued to rise steadily over the given period of time to finish at almost 40 percentage in the year 2018 which became the highest proportion of music sold.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (41 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ferent ways between 2011 to 2010.overall ,it can be seen that the percentage of mu...
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Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ercentage of music sold through download and cds purchased decreased,while by str...
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Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...gh download and cds purchased decreased,while by stream increased over the given time...
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rough downloads and streams respectively From that year onwards ,the amount of CD...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ams respectively From that year onwards ,the amount of CD music sold ,fell slowly...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ear onwards ,the amount of CD music sold ,fell slowly reaching almost a quarter in...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , the
... a quarter in the year 2018. Similarly,the percentage of songs sold via downloads ...
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Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , although
...sold via downloads experienced a decline,although it stops at above 30% in 2011,the figur...
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Line 7, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ear 2014 before falling significantly to 30percent at the end of the year. ...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fore falling significantly to 30percent at the end of the year. On the othe...
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Line 11, column 97, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ntinued to rise steadily over the given period of time to finish at almost 40 percentage in th...
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...h became the highest proportion of music sold.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, similarly, so, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94545454545 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86304467192 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 22.4926829268 182% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 21.6838073225 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 204.0 112.824112599 181% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.25 22.9334400587 180% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 5.23603664747 234% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.545762383172 0.215688989381 253% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.359135805535 0.103423049105 347% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.339316586698 0.0843802449381 402% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.359135805535 0.15604864568 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.339316586698 0.0819641961636 414% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.2329268293 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.3012195122 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.32 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.9970731707 167% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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