The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Given is the line graph depicting the sales of three best selling products namely bread, burns and pies per month in an undetermined bakery in 2014.

It is conspicuous that the money earned by selling pies and bread was higher in the last quarter than the first one, meanwhile the reverse was true for selling buns. Furthermore, bread brought dominant profit in the beginning and end of the year with the highest value.

When it comes to the pies, exactly 10000$ of pies were purchased in January documented after that the number of pies sold phunged gradually until 20000$ in August. This money remained intact within there months followed by a significant increase in the last quarter and reached a peak at 40000$ in December. In terms of buns, 40000$ was recorded in the first months and the income rose nonstop until August before witnessing a drastical plumment and reached its nadir of 30000$ in the last month.

Regarding the money which is earned by selling bread, despite several period of volatility in the outcome from March to September, the money earned stayed in high profit with 80000$ in January and December.

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Average: 5.1 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$10000'.
Suggestion: $10000
.... When it comes to the pies, exactly 10000$ of pies were purchased in January docum...
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Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$20000'.
Suggestion: $20000
...er of pies sold phunged gradually until 20000$ in August. This money remained intact w...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$40000'.
Suggestion: $40000
... the last quarter and reached a peak at 40000$ in December. In terms of buns, 40000$ w...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$40000'.
Suggestion: $40000
...t 40000$ in December. In terms of buns, 40000$ was recorded in the first months and th...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 472, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$30000'.
Suggestion: $30000
...tical plumment and reached its nadir of 30000$ in the last month. Regarding the mon...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$80000'.
Suggestion: $80000
...money earned stayed in high profit with 80000$ in January and December.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 945.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.921875 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37019227383 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 30.7378647035 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 22.9334400587 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.23603664747 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.054927588964 0.215688989381 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0277447721885 0.103423049105 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405842381614 0.0843802449381 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0417134832107 0.15604864568 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484747507793 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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