The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some country.

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The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some country.

The graph provided represents Industrial consumption of water in millions of cubic meters by one country in a year.

From the general perspective, it was observed that there are two main sources of water supply to the industries which were groundwater supply and public supply. It can be viewed that there is a vast utilization of groundwater compared to that of public supply.

The chemical manufacturing industry used the largest amount of water supply both groundwater and public supply. Topping on the list, it uses nearly 670 millions of cubic meters of water per year altogether. In the meanwhile, metal industry uses nearly 330 million moving to the specificity 240 million were supplied from groundwater and 90 from the public supply. Food and drinks industry occupies the third place in the list which uses nearly 110 million from the groundwater and 190 from the public supply which together consumes 300 million per year. Next position in order was the paper industry which uses nearly 190 million of groundwater and one-eighth part of groundwater that is approximately 20 million of public supply water is used per year. Machinery industry uses one-tenth part of the public supply as the groundwater supply. Textile industry and fuel industry together use very less water that is nearly 90 and 80 million cubic meters per year respectively.

In conclusion, most of the groundwater supply is utilized by the chemical industry followed by the Metal industry. Contradictory to this, public supply water is mostly used by only food/drinks and Machinery industries.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, third, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 965.302439024 138% => OK
No of words: 254.0 196.424390244 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22834645669 4.92477711251 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81144265608 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433070866142 0.547539520022 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 397.8 283.868780488 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0389449839 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91666666667 5.23603664747 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212473653821 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116075541768 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931310097715 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161347908426 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115615963829 0.0819641961636 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 11.4140731707 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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