The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the price of black and white and colour tv in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the price of black and white and colour tv in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The multiline graph illustrate the information about the average of monthly income and cost of black and white and colourful silver screen during 1953 and 1973. Units was measured in thousand Japanese yen.

In overall, a dramatically rise noticed in monthly salaries over the period since the price of black and white and colour magic box declined slightly at the end of the period.

With regards to a steady increase accounted at over 20,000 yen at the first year (1953) . Likewise, after one decade it continuously started growing at about 100,000 Japanese yen. In contrast, an amount of monthly income observed a rose inclined and reached at peak with 180,000 yen from 1973.

The graph further prove that price of black and white idiot box accounted a 100,000 Japanese yen between 1953, after this it showed a downward trend and seen over a 40,000 yen in 1963. Apart from this, the cost of black and white television accounted over a 20,000 yen at the end of the period. Moreover, amount of colourful silver screen was observing negligible during 1953 after that it grow high at peak with 180,000 yen in 1963. Lastly, it represented a declined and stable at 80,000 Japanese yen between 1973.C

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Average: 8.2 (11 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, lastly, likewise, moreover, apart from, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 995.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87745098039 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42907237921 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495098039216 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.0 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9521827152 43.030603864 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.23603664747 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252184496966 0.215688989381 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118526556192 0.103423049105 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642333459261 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181341465087 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682662444344 0.0819641961636 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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