The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.

The two charts give information about typical daily electricity demand in England both winter and summer summer and also show electricity consumption in home electric appliances.

In the typical day, at 0:00, the electricity demand in winter is around 33000 and it is about 17000 in summer season. This figure fluctuated through of the day and demand from 6:00 to 9:00 is lower than that for other hours of the day. During winter, the highest electricity consumption is 48000 from 21:00 to 23:00, and this figure for summer is 20000 from 12:00 to 14:00.

With regard to the pie chart, the devices which consume electricity with highest level are heating rooms, heating water, with 52% of the total. The demand for oven, kettles and washing machine is around 18%. The amount of electricity used by lighting, TV and radio is 15%, which is the same as that for vacuum cleaners, food mixer and electric tools.

Votes
Average: 5.4 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: summer
...icity demand in England both winter and summer summer and also show electricity consumption i...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the highest'.
Suggestion: with the highest
..., the devices which consume electricity with highest level are heating rooms, heating water,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 759.0 965.302439024 79% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89677419355 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39843861801 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 213.3 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6646535545 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.428571429 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383444153271 0.215688989381 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172974882635 0.103423049105 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117183368491 0.0843802449381 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266615910456 0.15604864568 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115227177328 0.0819641961636 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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