The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Loveraj on Thu, 09/06/2018 - 13:27

On having a cursory glance in 2011 almost 5000books were read by females but approximately 300books had been studying through men readers . in following year the figure of men readers had rocketed up-to roughly 8000 whilst the proportion of books which were read by feminine it was show gradually surged to around 400 then it was followed dramatically increase trend .In 2013 the level of both readers had stabilized at 10000

Furthermore in 2014 the rate of men readers were touched to the vertex with 14000 compared with women who were give less perfernce to read books

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Average: 2.2 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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... 14000 compared with women who were give less perfernce to read books
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 477.0 965.302439024 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 97.0 196.424390244 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9175257732 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.13828899271 3.73543355544 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53958662153 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 70.0 106.607317073 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.721649484536 0.547539520022 132% => OK
syllable_count: 136.8 283.868780488 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 22.4926829268 213% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 148.5 43.030603864 345% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 238.5 112.824112599 211% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.5 22.9334400587 211% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.0 5.23603664747 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135741346338 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102262114298 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227659724205 0.0843802449381 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108626928535 0.15604864568 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00629507724382 0.0819641961636 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.0 13.2329268293 196% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.68 61.2550243902 65% => OK
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.6 10.3012195122 190% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.06136585366 117% => OK
difficult_words: 21.0 40.7170731707 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 11.4329268293 227% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 10.9970731707 193% => OK
text_standard: 26.0 11.0658536585 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 22.4719101124 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 9
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