The graph shows the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The graph shows the percentage of overweight men and women in Australia between 1980 and 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of outweigh between both sexes during a period of thirty years from 1980 to 2010.

Overall, the percentage of outweigh was more among male than female throughout the given period. Also, the graph for both male and female witnessed a upward trend except in the last decade.

In 1980, the figure for male outweigh started at approximately 48%, then in the next decade the number rose by just 2%. Subsequently, the rate of outweigh reached a peak of 70% in 2000. Ultimately, the proportion steadily decrease and finished at around 68%.

For female, the trend was similar to male. The graph stood at 30% in 1980, then there was a slight increase during the next decade with account for 40%. The percentage remind exchange at the rest period with 50%.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...raph for both male and female witnessed a upward trend except in the last decade....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 673.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 136.0 196.424390244 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94852941176 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.41495297035 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47031467323 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602941176471 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 190.8 283.868780488 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5655490262 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.7777777778 112.824112599 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1111111111 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.55555555556 5.23603664747 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138597947725 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538844305076 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585103451378 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943572584417 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633377613757 0.0819641961636 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.2329268293 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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