Jenny is conducting a research project on cell phone use. The chart shows the percentage of students, and parents of students, at Jenny’s school who owned cell phone over a 14 year period. The table provides the cell phone ownership rate nationwide over the same timeframe.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the percentage of students, and parents of students, at Jenny’s school who owned cell phone over a 14 year period. The table provides the cell phone ownership rate nationwide over the same timeframe from 2002 to 2016.
The chart illustrates a general upward rising trend in the number of persons who possess a cell phone at the school. For adults, the percent rise in owning a handset was approximately crossing 30% reaching nearly 80% up from 50. There was no steep growth rate and the growth rate was fairly constant in this time period and this trend was echoed nationally as reflected by the table mentioned in the problem. This is in stark contrast to that of the ownership rate of mobile phones by kids , which increased steadily ,jumping from 0 to 25% in 10 years but suddenly saw a dramatic metoric rise and reached it's peak at just under 75% in the next four years.
The table gives a nationwide picture in contast with the local picture but is reflective of steady rise in the number of mobile users and it is also reveals that the percent rise in users in the first 8 years is almost double the rise in the next 4 years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he same timeframe from 2002 to 2016. The chart illustrates a general upward risi...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... ownership rate of mobile phones by kids , which increased steadily ,jumping from ...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...hones by kids , which increased steadily ,jumping from 0 to 25% in 10 years but su...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 946.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52631578947 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36871139035 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564593301435 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 281.7 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0047617158 43.030603864 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.142857143 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8571428571 22.9334400587 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365141482294 0.215688989381 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.195311620638 0.103423049105 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186920359338 0.0843802449381 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288605301812 0.15604864568 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.264323744629 0.0819641961636 322% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.59 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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