The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15 64 in employment between 2003 and 2009

Essay topics:

The line graph below gives information about the percentage of women aged 15-64 in employment between 2003 and 2009.

The line chart compares five different countries, namely Iceland, Turkey, Germany, Canada and Chile, in terms of the proportion of females between 15 and 64 years old having jobs.
Looking at the graph, it is immediately obvious that the percentage of women getting work in this age group in Iceland was the highest in all the period shown, the opposite was true for Iceland.
In 2003, just over 80% aged 15 to 64 in Iceland had occupations, a little lower was Canada with almost 70%, followed by Germany with close to 60% and these are also three countries had the rate of girls being employed over average. By contrast, these figures for Chile and Turkey were 35% and 25% sequentially.
Over the six years ensuing, Ireland saw a slight decrease in the employment rate of ladies in this age gathering, to under 80%, while there were trivial growths in the figures for Germany and Chile, by 1% and 5% in turn. A similar upward trend also happened in Canada but no different than the original data of this area. In 2005, the percentage of women from 15 to 64 years old going to work experienced a fall and hit the lowest point of about 20% before recovered to nearly the initial point in 2009.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 285, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...lso happened in Canada but no different than the original data of this area. In 2005...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 982.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 214.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58878504673 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3942203386 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 106.607317073 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61214953271 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 298.8 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.9258750509 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.285714286 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5714285714 22.9334400587 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.23603664747 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231304364598 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853629972194 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644936889051 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123406011635 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191266842431 0.0819641961636 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.2329268293 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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