The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

Essay topics:

The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map illustrates the development that occurred at Hogwards Grammar School during a six-year period beginning in 2004 and ending in 2010.

Overall, the noticeable change that happened at the school was the construction of school building. Additionally, the number of students attending the school increased over the research period.

In 2004, there was only a school building connected to the sport field that was quite big by a walking path. By 2010, the sport field was reconstructed to be smaller. In addition, there was a construction of two new school building and the walking path was also relocated to connect these buildings.

In 2004, there were 600 students attending the school, and the number of students had increased to 1000 by 2010. At the same time, the main road from east of the sport field led to a car park located in the northwest corner was reconstructed from a car park to another at two sides of the sport field.

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Average: 7.7 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 161.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88819875776 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75321374935 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509316770186 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9652610167 43.030603864 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.375 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.625 5.23603664747 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17548168029 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905091670924 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479140141356 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121496670711 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358079181633 0.0819641961636 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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