The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

Essay topics:

The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

These given data sources clearly communicate the development of a school namely Hogward Grammar School from 2004 to 2010.

A brief inspection reveals that the number of students attended has increase over the period due to the contruction of new infrastructures.

In 2004, there was only one school building connected to the central Sport Field by a walking path. To the south of the Sport field, there is a main road which led to a car park located in the west. At that time, the number of students that the Hogward school was able to admit was 600 students.

Six years later, two additional school buildings were erected to the right and the bottom of the previous one. The Sport Field was reconstructed to be smaller and the walking path was also relocated to connect 3 school buildings. In addition, the infrastructure of the school was also developed with an addition of new car park built to the east of the first school building. As a result, the number of pupils rised to 1000 individuals expectedly.

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Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... park located in the west. At that time, the number of students that the Hogward ...
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Line 7, column 380, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he east of the first school building. As a result, the number of pupils rised to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 844.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79545454545 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73216890049 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585227272727 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.3957420478 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.7777777778 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.23603664747 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150016510764 0.215688989381 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637338155879 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513658075011 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937018946036 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615502126519 0.0819641961636 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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