Petersburg Art Museum before and after renovations

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Petersburg Art Museum before and after renovations

The diagram illustrates a building sketch of old Petersburg Art Museum and after its renovation. Overall the main change to the Art Museum are new construction of cafeteria and a classroom which was demolished.
Old building had a lobby located next to the entrance door. The Building had 2 classrooms. The first was located next to the east of lobby, while the second was in the north-east. The Art Museum also had 2 museum rooms. The first one is ancient art room was located in the north of lobby, while the second (modern art room) was in the north of the first one. Additionally, there was a sculpture room in the east of modern art room.
After that, the building is renovated and have several changes. First, modern art gallery is expanded by relocated sculpture room to outside of museum building in the east of modern art gallery. Moreover, ancient art room also is expanded by removing the second classroom. However, a cafeteria is constructed to the east of ancient art room which located in the outside.
To conclude, the main change are expansion of 2 art rooms by relocated sculpture room and destroyed the second classroom. Additionally a new building was constructed too.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The diagram illustrates a building sketc...
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... and a classroom which was demolished. Old building had a lobby located next to...
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...while the second was in the north-east. The Art Museum also had 2 museum rooms. The...
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...The Art Museum also had 2 museum rooms. The first one is ancient art room was locat...
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...e room in the east of modern art room. After that, the building is renovated an...
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...rt room which located in the outside. To conclude, the main change are expansi...
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...oom and destroyed the second classroom. Additionally a new building was constructed too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, moreover, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 987.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83823529412 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74822563427 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 79.0 106.607317073 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387254901961 0.547539520022 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 297.0 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5702537382 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5 112.824112599 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5714285714 22.9334400587 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249340437267 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10472061893 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102929445322 0.0843802449381 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17927216017 0.15604864568 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104624767357 0.0819641961636 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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