The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and mak

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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart is a description of the main causes of land degradation. It shows that most of global soil degradation (65%) is due to overgrazing and deforestation (35% and 30% respectively) and over-cultivation answers for around 28%, while the remaining 7% is because of other reasons. 

The first thing we can see is that in the 1990s, the mentioned causes affected different regions in diverse ways. Firstly, we can see that Europe has the highest percentage of land degraded (23%) in which the most land degraded by deforestation (9.8%) followed by over-cultivation (7.7%) and lastly 5.5% by over-grazing. Secondly, Oceania ranks 2nd in total by 13%, 11.3% of which is due to over-grazing and the remaining 1.7% is due to deforestation. 

In contrast, deforestation and over-grazing had minimal effect on North America (0.2% and 1.5%), whereas over cultivation was the major underlying cause by 3.3 out of 5%. 

To sum up, many regions are affected by soil degradation differently, but clearly Europe suffered more than either Oceania or North America in the 1990s and their land became the least productive.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...maining 7% is because of other reasons. 
 The first thing we can see is that in th...
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...remaining 1.7% is due to deforestation. 

In contrast, deforestation and over-graz...
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...ajor underlying cause by 3.3 out of 5%. 

To sum up, many regions are affected by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, whereas, while, in contrast, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.97073170732 277% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12637362637 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19083206235 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631868131868 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1249967544 43.030603864 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.285714286 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.2857142857 5.23603664747 254% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138329838173 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800806055079 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082320866882 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11971591718 0.15604864568 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272807715447 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 61.2550243902 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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