The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given piecharts illustrate online sales for retail sectors which are travel, film/music, books and clothes in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
First of all, in 2003, the maximum sales was of travel which accounts for 36% of online sales. Further, sales of film/music was 21%. 19% of online sales accounted for books and 24% of clothes were sold in New Zealand.
Secondly, in 2013, 33% of film/music were sold in online. Moreover, 22% of books were sold in New Zealand by online. Clothes only accounted for 16% of online sales and 29% of online sales by travel.
The online sales of travel decreased from 36% to 29% in 2013. More film/music were sold by online in 2013 than in 2003. the sales of clothes declined by 8% in 2013. However, there was not much decline in sales of music in 2013 as compared to 2003.
To sum up, in 2003, the online sales of travel was more all other retail sectors. Further, sales of film/music was highest in comparison to other trade sectors. Least percentage of clothes were sold in 2013 but in 2003 the sales of boks was less than other retail sectors.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 894.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 196.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5612244898 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25980670944 2.65546596893 85% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.413265306122 0.547539520022 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7352858635 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.8571428571 112.824112599 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.0 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.09268292683 342% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264264436614 0.215688989381 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125726782364 0.103423049105 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598184152828 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197090000322 0.15604864568 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477595247389 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 13.2329268293 53% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 61.2550243902 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.3012195122 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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