The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie graphs demonstrate New Zealand’s revenue from internet in retail domain for one decade spanning from 2003 to 2013.

Overall, there are general increases of percentage in Books and in Film/Music domain, while the figures of Clothes and of Travels are lower during the decade.

During the ten years, the highest change happened in Film/Music sector. Its online sales increased by 12%, from 21% in 2003 to 33% in 2013, making it the major sector in 2013 in terms of online sales. In addition, started at 19% in 2013, ended at 22% in 2013, the revenue in Books sector increased by 3%.

On the contrary, Clothes domain and Travel domain lost by 8% and 7% of online market share, respectively. As a result, market share ranks of Clothes domain and of Travel domain backward from 2nd and 1st in 2003, to 4th and 2nd in 2013, in order.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
while, in addition, as a result, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 703.0 965.302439024 73% => OK
No of words: 149.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71812080537 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49378814695 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46988984366 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577181208054 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 197.1 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.2445329584 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.428571429 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192547186903 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901865359058 0.103423049105 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828690914816 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110527410054 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883901169666 0.0819641961636 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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