The pie charts below show some employment patterns in a developed country summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant

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The pie charts below show some employment patterns in a developed country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The two given pie charts provide proportion of males and females in employment in six broad categories, divided into manual and non manual types.
As an overall trend, a greater number of women work in non-manual occupations, and the reverse is true for men.
With regard to non- manual careers, while a greater percentage of women are found in clerical type positions, there is a smaller percentage of women employed in managerial an professional positions. Other non manual occupations in male sex is four times more common than in female, with 2% and 0,5% respectively.
As for manual occupations, the biggest difference between two sexes is in the employment of craft workers, where males make up roughly a fifth of the workforce and females constitute just above a tiny fraction at 4,5%. In terms of general labouring quantity, men, which is 11%, is slightly more popular than women, which is 6%. Interestingly, there is not a great deal of difference between the percentage of men doing other forms of manual work (25%) and women in the others (32%).

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...centage of women employed in managerial an professional positions. Other non manua...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while, as for, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 878.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93258426966 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82264098112 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606741573034 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 271.8 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7080195679 43.030603864 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.428571429 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4285714286 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0552804204104 0.215688989381 26% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259995748148 0.103423049105 25% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348433870763 0.0843802449381 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0365161190215 0.15604864568 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318317388265 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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