Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour.
What is your opinion?
It is thought by some people that Violence on television and in computer games cause many harmful effects on society, whereas others say that these factors don’t have any notable effect on an individual's behavior. In my opinion, television programs affect the attitude of today’s youth and self-development.
The television program and computer games can be educational as well as entertaining and sometime these may lead to aggressive behavior especially children because they are very easy to be influenced as they are still young and just about to know the whole world. So, whatever they see on television or games, they tend to imitate it. After watching many violence shows, they might be immune to violence and this will automatically encourage them not to hesitate to be violent in reality. Besides that, television programs also cause the development of negative social amongst youths due to the advertisements of alcohol, smoking, and sex scenes. People are more likely to learn negative values from television programs and games.
Television programs easily affect one's self-development and self-esteem. People who are addicted to television or games are willing to do anything for it including sacrifice their sleeping time just to watch their favorite shows or play video games. This will indirectly cause self-development to be affected. Television programs affect self-esteem because they might put on a diet as they want to compete with skinny beautiful models and actresses that can be seen on television. For an instant, every year men and women involved themself in different surgeries just to look like their favorite tv actor or actress. In the end, we have to remember and be aware that television also seems to possess more negative effects than positive ones.
In conclusion, tv programs and games might badly influence many individuals' habits and lead them to aggressive behavior and low self-esteem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
...scenes. People are more likely to learn negative values from television programs and gam...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...mes. Television programs easily affect ones self-development and self-esteem. Peopl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, look, may, so, still, well, whereas, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 6.8 279% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 5.60731707317 464% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 965.302439024 169% => OK
No of words: 306.0 196.424390244 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95031260766 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 106.607317073 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571895424837 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 283.868780488 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6211902354 43.030603864 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.571428571 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.23603664747 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205459296006 0.215688989381 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725533479185 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854155923112 0.0843802449381 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149883097569 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112279735173 0.0819641961636 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 40.7170731707 201% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.