The government should ban smoking in all public places even though this would restrict some other people s freedoms Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer

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The government should ban smoking in all public places, even though this would restrict some other people's freedoms.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer.

Submitted by sarah830 on Sun, 08/16/2020 - 15:55

It is thought by some people the authorities should prohibit smoking in public places, while others suppose that this would place a restriction on ones’ personal freedoms. In my opinion, a smoking ban needs to consider many places such as offices, parks, and beaches because it is not good for human health as well it affects the productivity level of many employees.
Smoking is a major health risk, but still, people give different reasons for smoking most of these justifications are not very reasonable. Smokers have an increased chance of getting stomach cancer or ulcers. Smoking can weaken the muscle that controls the lower end of your gullet and allow acid from the stomach to travel in the wrong direction back up your gullet. Smoking is a significant risk factor for developing kidney cancer, and the more you smoke the greater the risk. For example, research has shown that if you regularly smoke 10 cigarettes a day, you are one and a half times more likely to develop kidney cancer compared with a non-smoker. Restrictions of smoking in public places are might be to reduce the risk of these diseases.

Nowadays smoke-free workplaces are encouraged to be implemented by the employers not solely because of health reasons but also because “the main reason for productivity loss due to the smoking in the workplace. This loss of productivity is contributed by employees having too many smoke breaks which causes numerous interruptions to the job at hand and therefore becoming inefficient. Due to this inefficiency, non-smokers have to work harder to compensate for the workload of smokers when they are on smoke breaks. Recent studies show that non-smokers complete any task faster than smokers more than 50% cases. Finally, banning smoking in offices is an effective step towards increasing employee productivity.
In conclusion, the prohibition of smoking in different public places is good for public health as well it significantly increases worker performance in workplaces.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
...ause of health reasons but also because “the main reason for productivity loss du...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87956987547 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8700613902 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.214285714 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28578107193 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100844115422 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734240725622 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178725315499 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556470709921 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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