Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Essay topics:

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is thought by some that harmful types of sport ought to be prevented while there are others who argue that people should have an opportunity to choose what they want to do by themselves. In my opinion, although dangerous sport helps to build endurance and make money, I believe that it should be banned, as it is harmful for sport member’s health and influence badly to young generation.

On the one hand, it is often thought by many people that dangerous sport should be prohibited due to harmful consequences for people’s health and I agree. People might be seriously injured when they enrolled in dangerous sport activities and more their lives can be threatened by death. For example, two young men died during their trip to the peak of the Everest Mountain, rescuers could not approach them in order to save their lives due to severe weather conditions. Another point to consider, is that different fight sport activities influence badly young people. Fight sports encourage people to the violence.

On the other hand, according to some people going in for dangerous sport help people to be strong, hardy and disciplined, in addition, it can help to earn big amount of money. For example, boxing helps people to build strong bodies and always be focused on their aims. In other word, in order to be successful in such sports, people have to work hard everyday and push up themselves to the limits it is beneficial for their future life. Furthermore, fighting sport activities may help people earn tremendous amount of money, as all sport clothes manufacturers pay them big money for advertising by wearing clothes with brand names.

In conclusion, despite people have different views, I believe that we should avoid any dangerous sport activities as it has many dire consequences.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 352, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...n such sports, people have to work hard everyday and push up themselves to the limits it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 5.60731707317 517% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 965.302439024 156% => OK
No of words: 301.0 196.424390244 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01328903654 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69715475413 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 106.607317073 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528239202658 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 283.868780488 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4028255845 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.75 112.824112599 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 22.9334400587 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 5.23603664747 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337794257229 0.215688989381 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145705944703 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794891093246 0.0843802449381 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224285886736 0.15604864568 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054898078267 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 40.7170731707 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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