The table below gives information about favourite pastimes in different countries in percentage.

Essay topics:

The table below gives information about favourite pastimes in different countries in percentage.

The given tabular chart reveals the information about the seven favourite pastimes activities which were performed by the peoples from aged 30 to 50 years old in eight different countries. The data is celibrated in percentum which is clearly and coherently representation.

It can be seen that, in Canada and Australia, 60% and 65% people were passed their time in watching tv, 22% and 30% people spend their time in sports activities, 15% people were spend their time in reading, 40% and 45% people were used their time in hobbies , 3% and 5% people used music activity, 2% and 4% people used sleep activties and at last only 30% people used beach activity in Australia respectively. In addition to this, in France and Fngland, 30% people were spend their time in reading activities, 4% people used music as pastime activity and 20% and 21% were used in hobbies and at the end, 4% people were used music activity respectively.

As far as trend, is concerned that, in Korea and China, 22% and 15% people were used tv as partime activities, 21% and 25% were used sports, 60% were used reading activities, 45% and 50% were used hobbies, 2% were used in music, 2% and 5% were used beach and 4% and 5% were used sleeping activities. Moreover, in USA 60% people used tv, 23% were used sport, 15% peoples used reading, 42% used hobbies, 23% used music, 30% were used beach and 2% people used sleepling and at last, in Japan, only 62% people used only reading activity as pastimes activities from aged 30 to 40 years.

Overall it is evident that, more people were used reading as favorite pastimes activity and on the other side, only japan is the country in which people used only reading activity as a partime activity.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'pastimes'' or 'pastime's'?
Suggestion: pastimes'; pastime's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 7.0 329% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 6.8 324% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1421.0 965.302439024 147% => OK
No of words: 302.0 196.424390244 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70529801325 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46889393585 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407284768212 0.547539520022 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 428.4 283.868780488 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.4926829268 191% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.6978007632 43.030603864 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 203.0 112.824112599 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.1428571429 22.9334400587 188% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0423249179873 0.215688989381 20% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428616264019 0.103423049105 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684180167137 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0614173201093 0.15604864568 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657920778475 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.3 13.2329268293 169% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 61.2550243902 73% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.93 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.9970731707 175% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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