The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data compares the monthly spending patterns of an ordinary household in Australia during the decade 1991 to 2001. Figures are measured in Australia dollars ($).
Overall, the amount of money spent per month exhibited a marginal increase across the period shown, of which the family spent the most on non-necessary goods but the least on attire. Of the six categories provided, only the spending on clothes and transport was seen to reduce.
In total, the sum spent by the family increased by 6% during the years in question, from $675 to $715. The largest growth in expenditure was seen in power and water, for which the outgoings increased from $75 to $120 throughout the decade, representing a growth of 60%. By comparison, the expenditure on subsistence and accommodation only recorded a modest rise of $5 each. Products and services which were not necessary also demonstrated a growth in expenses, rising by $20 to $270 in 2001.
The two items that bucked the upward trend illustrated above were clothing and transport. The spending on garments decreased by one-third from 30 to 20 between 1991 and 2001. Similarly, the family the spent less on transportation in 2001, a reduction of approximately 35% as opposed to the 1991 figure.
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Essay evaluation report
during the decade 1991 to 2001.
during a decade from 1991 to 2001.
from 1991 to 2001.
on non-necessary goods
on non-essential goods and services //be complete
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flaws:
1. still see % like:
increased by 6%
representing a growth of 60%
a reduction of approximately 35%
in the actual exam, you really don't have time to count those percentage
2. the sentences are not developed so smoothly from the warning messages like:
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
so you got a low mark by e-grader.
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still need to read the sample essay and compare:
https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-ielts-academic-essays/tabl…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 206 200
No. of Characters: 996 1000
No. of Different Words: 121 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.788 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.835 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.871 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 72 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 52 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.454 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.345 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.037 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 4
Hi there,
Hi there,
I am confuse about the mark because the report I unloaded here is the original answer wirten by one former IELTS examiner. I know maybe it is not a perfect answer as he said, but I still think it may worth more marks.
Well, a former IELTS
Well, a former IELTS examiner doesn't mean a good writer. It has a lot of issues from the original answer and it is actually misleading users like putting a lot of percentages in the essay. If you compare the sample essay we give and this essay, you can understand which one is better.
So don't be confused. Follow the samples we give which are the best.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mmodation only recorded a modest rise of each. Products and services which were n...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, similarly, so, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1023.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99024390244 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93117472639 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.9151893556 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6363636364 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 5.23603664747 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134974399413 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489358797264 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438952187778 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808402208838 0.15604864568 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274003707422 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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