Take a look at the graphics and complete the task.The charts show the proportion of male and female employees in different job categories in an engineering company in 2005 and in 2015.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task.

The charts show the proportion of male and female employees in different job categories in an engineering company in 2005 and in 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided two bar graphs represent the percentages of male and female, who were doing jobs in five different categories ( Vice Presidents, Directors, managers, Analysts and Administrators) in an engineering industry, during 2005 and 2015.

In summary, the higher numbers of females were doing the job in Administrators compared to males, whereas, the higher numbers of males in others four categories compared to females, in 2005. In 2015, the higher numbers of males were working at a place of Analysts, while, the higher numbers of females in other four categories.

In 2005, the numbers of males were doing jobs at the place of Vice President (70%), Directors (60%), Managers (50%) and Analysts (70%), however, the percentages of females were Vice President ,Directors, Manegers and Analysts in approximately 30, 40, 45 and 30 respectively. Further more,almost 10 % males were doing the job as an Administrator and 90% females.

In addition, In 2015, nearly 50 %of males and females, who had been doing the job in both types of categories ( Vice President and Manager). At a place of Administrator, 80% of females, which was highest percentages in 2015, and 20% of males did a job.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...however, the percentages of females were Vice President ,Directors, Manegers and ...
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... had been doing the job in both types of categories Vice President and Manager. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, whereas, while, in addition, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 986.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 193.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10880829016 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02800283154 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492227979275 0.547539520022 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 296.1 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2676907081 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.857142857 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 22.9334400587 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195970150665 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109937600485 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289614434519 0.0843802449381 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13564560027 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269876623903 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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