The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1900 and 2000. Write a report for a lecturer describing the information in these charts.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts below show changes in world population by region between 1900 and 2000. Write a report for a lecturer describing the information in these charts.

The provided two charts illustrate information about the number of students who had different age group chose to study for different reasons and they were given some scholarships by employers.

Overall, it is seen that studying for career decreased rapidly while studying for interest increased steadily depend on the students' age.Also, employer prefered to support the most young students and the least elder people.

According to the data,many students chose to study mostly for career when they were under 26 age with exactly %80,which meant that it was eight times higher than going to university for interest. this figures continues to declined by %10 from %70 to %60 between 26-29 and 30-39 respectively while many people who prefer to study for their interest increased by %5 slightly from about %15 to %20 . The proportion of studying for career was the same as studying interest ,with %40 between 40 and 49. Also,There was a significant decline of 20 %, reaching from %40 to%20 to for making career whereas going to institution for interest peaked at % 70 ,which meant it had the highest level in over 49.

If we look at second chart, employer helped the most student who were under 26 for grant,with exactly %60.Besides, there was a considerable fall from &50 to almost %35 between 26-29 and 30-39 consecutively.However, this proportion started to grow by %8 slightly from %37 to %45 between 40-49 and over 49 sequentially.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...sed steadily depend on the students age.Also, employer prefered to support the most ...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: LEAST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'least eld', 'least old'?
Suggestion: least eld; least old
...support the most young students and the least elder people. According to the data,many ...
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Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , many
... elder people. According to the data,many students chose to study mostly for care...
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Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tudents chose to study mostly for career when they were under 26 age with exactly...
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Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... than going to university for interest. this figures continues to declined by %10 fr...
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Line 5, column 211, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'continue'.
Suggestion: continue
...o university for interest. this figures continues to declined by %10 from %70 to %60 betw...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...sed by %5 slightly from about %15 to %20 . The proportion of studying for career ...
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Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... . The proportion of studying for career was the same as studying interest ,with ...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...areer was the same as studying interest ,with %40 between 40 and 49. Also,There w...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , There
...terest ,with %40 between 40 and 49. Also,There was a significant decline of 20 %, reac...
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Line 5, column 648, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... institution for interest peaked at % 70 ,which meant it had the highest level in ...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , with
...most student who were under 26 for grant,with exactly %60.Besides, there was a consid...
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Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Besides
...ere under 26 for grant,with exactly %60.Besides, there was a considerable fall from &50...
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Line 7, column 207, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: However
...5 between 26-29 and 30-39 consecutively.However, this proportion started to grow by %8 ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, look, second, so, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1206.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 236.0 196.424390244 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11016949153 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85856442238 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 106.607317073 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601694915254 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5679441472 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.285714286 112.824112599 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7142857143 22.9334400587 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.23603664747 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.098140648013 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555971388803 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0191310248878 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682475865023 0.15604864568 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196931762008 0.0819641961636 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.2329268293 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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