The two pie charts compare the percentages of British students at a teriary school in England who had ability to use variety of languages between 2000 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The two pie charts compare the percentages of British students at a teriary school in England who had ability to use variety of languages between 2000 and 2010.

The two pie charts compare the percentages of British students at a teriary school in England who had ability to use variety of languages between 2000 and 2010. Overall, the proportions of no other language, two other languages and no other languages experienced a increase in the period of a decade. Also, Bristish students spoke more common in another language for the given time.
As is observed from the graph, in 2000, the figure for another language had occupied at 30%. This number was as high as twice that of no other language and French only. It is noticeable that only 10% of British students spoke two other language and German only for each. In 2000, the second prevaling language in addition to english was spanish, at 20%. In the following 10 years, there was a slight rise in the number of British students using French, no other language and another language. To be specific, the percentage of another language remained the most common and had climbed to 35% in 2010. Furthermore, the figure for two other language witnessed an upsurge by 5%. By contrast, proportions of spanish and French had a downward trend and stood at only 10% for each in 2010. However the number of German was stable , at 10% in the given period of time.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nd another language. To be specific, the percentage of another language remained ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, second, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1034.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 218.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74311926606 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51684759152 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481651376147 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8042512737 43.030603864 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1666666667 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420695754768 0.215688989381 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173717426149 0.103423049105 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.251954290445 0.0843802449381 299% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.398786614594 0.15604864568 256% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165087555384 0.0819641961636 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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