WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British prison system Sum

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WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task
The two figures below show the rate of criminal convictions among men and women of
different ages in the UK and the proportion of male and female prison inmates in the British
prison system.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant
Write at least 150 words

Given are the two graphs concerning criminality in the UK. The first reveals key data on the criminal commitment between both sexes of various age groups, whereas the latter indicates the rates of men and women offenders in British prisons.
Overall, it is evident from the information supplied that an overwhelming majority of criminals are males. Another fascinating point is that most crimes occur during adolescence.
From a negligible 2 percent among ten-year-old boys, the male conviction rate soars to 16 percent among 20-year-old ones. The percentage of female offenders, however, meanwhile, climbs from 0 percent among girls aged 10 to some 5 percent among 20-year-old ones. The subsequent age groups of both sexes, however, witness a dramatic decline in criminality. A mere 2 percent of crimes are committed by 60-year-old men, while women of the same age do not commit any offense at all.
As regards prison inmates, men outnumber women 24 to 1. Some 96 percent of all prisoners are men, and the remainder is females.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are the two graphs concerning criminality i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, so, whereas, while, as regards

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 864.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14285714286 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89094587068 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.678571428571 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1476080508 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.23603664747 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209533479056 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081763643352 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473450952003 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117677547508 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058635078707 0.0819641961636 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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