You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your lettercorrect the information in the articleexplain why it is import

Essay topics:

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

correct the information in the article

explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear sir,

I am regular reader of your magazine “Around the World" from last 2 years. I really like your way of storytelling about the world knows places. Your magazine improves my knowledge and also make me motivated to plan the visit of most interesting places in different countries.

It’s my painful duty to inform you that the issue of Dec 2019 in which you indicate about the beauty of Hunza (Haven in the land of Pakistan) contain some wrong information.

I would like to correct you for future because it’s very important for the good will of your Magazine. I belong to Pakistan and have lot of information about this place which you indicate in your article, bellow you can find the correct information with sources,

1) Hunza is not located on the west side of Pakistan, however it is located in northern side of Pakistan, according to the map and present situation.

2) Hunza is not safest for tourism its totally wrong because the crime rate in Hunza is Zero according to the report of world tourism community they find hunza is quite friendly and safe for everyone.

It’s my request to correct the above information in your issue.

Regards

Umer javaid

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 35, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...on. 2 Hunza is not safest for tourism its totally wrong because the crime rate in...
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Line 23, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ove information in your issue. Regards Umer javaid
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1014.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97058823529 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61319570848 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.4555248619 43.030603864 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224393725366 0.215688989381 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091266679691 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590184265764 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113797304948 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893643404753 0.0819641961636 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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