You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your lettercorrect the information in the articleexplain why it is import

Essay topics:

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.

Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter

correct the information in the article

explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information

suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

Dear Sir,

I am glad to know that you have published a detailed article regarding my city, Lahore, but unfortunately there is some false information in the magzine and I request you to amend and republish the article.

The article was published on 22, December 2019 and it was about the tourism activities in the historic city of Lahore. It is mentioned, that the Lahore city authorities have banned the entrance of foreign tourists in the grand Badshahi Mosque, which is completely false. Last week I visited the mosque and talked some of the administration about the matter. I came to know that everyone is welcomed to visit the mosques and take pictures from 11 am to 8 pm., 7 days a week. There is no such conditions as written in the article.

As a world renowned magazine, you people should at least verify the information before publication. It is the matter of the country's reputation and you should consider it first. Lahore is among the world's top favorite tourist destination and such false information could effect the tourism in the country, thereby, it is important to print wisely.

I request you to please republish the article in the next edition by highlighting the facts which were wrong in the previous edition. This would really help in portraying a better image of my hometown.

I expect your reply at your earliest.

Yours faithfully,

Wajeeha Umer.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir, I am glad to know that you have publishe...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...st week I visited the mosque and talked some of the administration about the matter. I came...
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Line 13, column 272, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...nation and such false information could effect the tourism in the country, thereby, it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, regarding, so, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 5.60731707317 446% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1167.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 235.0 196.424390244 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96595744681 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76894764719 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 106.607317073 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591489361702 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 283.868780488 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 1.53170731707 718% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6138101429 43.030603864 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7692307692 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0769230769 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207406447322 0.215688989381 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632773007073 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474670849558 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106185893591 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373798380753 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 40.7170731707 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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