You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the jobgive details of why you woul

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

explain why you would like the job

give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Mr. Green,

I am writing with the reference to your ad for someone to take care of your child in Sydney. I feel interested in the job because it best suits me during my visit to Australia next week.

I will be staying in Sydney from 1st May to 30th November 2020 for my 6-month diploma. During this period, I would have to do some part-time job to earn my bread and butter. As it is a weekend program, I will be free on other weekdays. So, I will be able to take care of the child for other weekdays. Moreover, I am a child-friendly person and I am sure your little one will love my company.

As I mention, I love to spend time with children, I can also offer to teach some language skills. In this way, we can best spend our time. I am so much concerned about child security and I would make sure proper child safety. After employing me you would not have to worry about his homework and outdoor activities.

I will be coming to Sydney on 1st May and my Computer Diploma classes will start on the 3rd of May, but they will only happen on weekends, specifically, Sundays. Other free time I will be utilizing in practicing my learnings, and writing online articles and blogs, which I can do from home on my laptop.

I am awaiting your earliest response.

Yours Sincerely,

Wajeeha Umer

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Green, I am writing with the reference to your ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... my visit to Australia next week. I will be staying in Sydney from 1st May ...
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Line 23, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...arliest response. Yours Sincerely, Wajeeha Umer
^^^^
Line 25, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Yours Sincerely, Wajeeha Umer
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 1.00243902439 1696% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 5.60731707317 713% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1079.0 965.302439024 112% => OK
No of words: 243.0 196.424390244 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44032921811 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48863357935 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56378600823 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 1.53170731707 914% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.636140406 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.9333333333 112.824112599 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.66666666667 5.23603664747 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117644023417 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440771868163 0.103423049105 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462630790713 0.0843802449381 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0678382872994 0.15604864568 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414027290543 0.0819641961636 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 13.2329268293 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 40.7170731707 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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