You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter:say how you feel about his performancegive details of your musical activitiesexplain how you would lik

Essay topics:

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter:

say how you feel about his performance

give details of your musical activities

explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities.

Dear Atif,

I hope you are doing well and enjoying good health. I am a big fan of your music and writing to express my moments of joy at your concert held in Alhamrah Hall, last weekend.

I always wanted to be a part of these musical events especially in which you were performing. Luckily, for this one I got the ticket. I am following you since my teens and you are among one of my favorite singers. Believe me, your performance was breath taking and all the time I was enjoying every node of your music. It was just awesome; you made my evening.

I am glad to let you know I am a musician too, but I have just kick started my career. I am interested in jazz music and am playing nodes in different small-scale events such as school parties and family gatherings. I have my other team members with me and I am the vocalist, others have their own jobs. We do music practices every Saturday from 4 p.m. to 9 p.m. We have learned a lot form your singing style and your hard work charges us whenever we feel demotivated.

I would love to have one or two jamming sessions with you. I know you have a busy schedule but It will help us a lot, and it will be our honor to practice with you and learn from such a music idol. Please have some time and consider my request.

I am eagerly waiting for your response.

Yours sincerely

Ali.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Atif, I hope you are doing well and enjoying g...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... held in Alhamrah Hall, last weekend. I always wanted to be a part of these mus...
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Line 7, column 122, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
...reer. I am interested in jazz music and am playing nodes in different small-scale ...
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Line 7, column 217, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s school parties and family gatherings. I have my other team members with me and ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, such as, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 32.9175257732 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 256.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.2578125 4.54256449028 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36106882494 2.54303337028 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 127.690721649 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8206428094 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.125 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 4.34317383033 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 7.41237113402 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270124267017 0.216113520407 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958979833447 0.0766984524023 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623627676856 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156594025837 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800217625 0.0580467560999 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 8.37731958763 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 70.7449484536 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.