You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where r

Essay topics:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

My answer:

A glance at the graph provided reveals the number of books read at Burnaby Public Library by men and women during the period from 2011 to 2014.

It is evident that there was an upward trend in the number of book read by men and women. The number of books read by men saw an exponential increase, whereas, the number of books read by women saw a slight grow.

Increasing steadily from approximately 3000 to 4000 books between 2011 and 2014, the number of books read by men then climbed considerably, reaching a peak of 14000 books in 2014.

Women, meanwhile, started off reading more books than men, between 2011 and 2013, the number of books rose double from 5000 to 10000 books, which was the highest figure in this period. This was followed by a steady decline to 8000 books in 2014, this was the same number as in th 2012.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wed by a steady decline to 8000 books in 2014, this was the same number as in th ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 696.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51948051948 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2264679929 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 84.0 106.607317073 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 184.5 283.868780488 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.926353131 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.23603664747 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352640402342 0.215688989381 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204217205078 0.103423049105 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689017144956 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249185450915 0.15604864568 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755198207507 0.0819641961636 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 79.94 61.2550243902 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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