A company proposed to sponsor either a sports team or two open-air concert . Write a letter to suggest which one the company should fund.

Essay topics:

A company proposed to sponsor either a sports team or two open-air concert . Write a letter to suggest which one the company should fund.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your request on the proposed sponsorship, for either a local children's sports team for two years or to fund two open-air concerts.

Firstly, if you decide to sponsor the local children's sports team, it will help the children develop a team spirit which is a key skill, also it will help create bonding among the members of the community. Some wards may even end up developing a career from in the future.

However, paying for two open-air concerts too is a very good idea because the less privilege people will be able to attend the concert free of charge. It will also create unity in the community which is important for the growth of the community.

In my opinion, I think it is best you sponsor the sports team, because the advantage of the likelihood of the participants building a career from it far out-weigh other advantages.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Davidson Cameron.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, i think, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 32.9175257732 43% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 806.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79761904762 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58154974637 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 127.690721649 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60119047619 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.4632530509 44.8134815571 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 4.34317383033 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237868804702 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791999911572 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879568352647 0.0603063233224 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118543273486 0.12726935374 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967919018448 0.0580467560999 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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