The company you are working for offers funds and required things to the groups of local community every year. Write a letter to your manager suggesting a group you know in your community.
What is the group?
Why do they do and why helping them is a good idea?
How your company funds can help them?
Dear Mr. Victor,
I am writing this letter to tell you about a community which I am part of, for our annual contribution. I realize we are due to donate the prescribed amount as per company’s corporate social responsibility, and being a part of the team, I would like to mention one community which I am well aware of.
The area where community hall is located is just adjacent to the outgoing tunnel near Dwarka. Its name is “Free Treatment for God’s child”. The group basically comprises of people who are somehow related to health sector. As we are a pharmaceutical company, they have chosen me for the inventory department. What they do is that they support poor people who need any kind of physical treatment which they cannot afford. They either pay for them or treat them in their in-house facilities.
As mentioned above, they look after all the medical needs of humans who don’t have enough money to get their treatment done and nowhere to go to. But they also provide medical facilities to street animals and for that they have recently started a campaign. The reason why helping them would be a great idea to us is that it would actually be beneficial for us. Being a pharmaceutical company, we can directly provide them medicines instead of another product. Consequently, it would save us a lot of money as we won’t have to spare the margin with another brand as we would be donating what we are manufacturing, rather than providing any other commodity.
Money provided by our company can not only be used to produce those required medicines, but it could also help them to experiment on other generic medicine too, which can be fruitful for them in cases of severe diseases like cancer or heart attack, for which general medicines are too expensive to afford and even a community as this only may not be able to provide those poor with it.
I hope you would find this community good enough and will do the needful. Thanking you in anticipation.
Yours sincerely,
Hemant Tejwani
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 176, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
...apos;s child'. The group basically comprises of people who are somehow related to healt...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, look, may, so, well, after all, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 7.48453608247 240% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 4.92783505155 284% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.03092783505 396% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 32.9175257732 155% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 937.175257732 183% => OK
No of words: 349.0 206.0 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90257879656 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77376032792 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 127.690721649 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573065902579 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 290.88556701 186% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.28734968 44.8134815571 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.647058824 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203060952565 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665252216059 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406479101802 0.0603063233224 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111097219295 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042021698166 0.0580467560999 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 41.2886597938 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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