A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for a feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the c

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for a feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Manager,

I am aware that a lucrative company like Amazon has taken social responsibility initiatives to help the children with a sports aid or free of cost entertainment to the citizens. I am very glad!

It is axiomatic; obviously true that your charity will foster sportsmanship among the students who put in arduous efforts to win medals in the past and there is good chance now that they can metamorphose to future star athletes once they get a chance to play in international games two years in a row. This proposal is inspiring!

Besides, we have a small arena where the local musicians play different genders of tantalising i.e. interesting and modern music every festive season. Also, the two hotels locally conduct music concerts frequently and the tickets are not so expensive. I sincerely doubt if there is any benefit for you here as you can see the monsoons are soon going to arrive where accretions of stagnated water and debris is inevitable making it inhospitable to host a show.

I would like to vote for sports sponsorship as this will make our town renown in case of a victory.

Regards,

Yasaswi

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 961.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 193.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9792746114 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8352149804 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.704663212435 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 16.3608247423 196% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.8726401878 44.8134815571 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.166666667 76.5299724578 209% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 32.1666666667 16.8248392259 191% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12213539518 0.216113520407 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472190306378 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300163979538 0.0603063233224 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654521400053 0.12726935374 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221737970915 0.0580467560999 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 8.37731958763 216% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 70.7449484536 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 7.45979381443 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 7.59969072165 128% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 41.2886597938 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 8.62886597938 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 8.54432989691 173% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 8.15463917526 233% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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