A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the co

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter:Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team, summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts, say how you thing the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to your enquiry about feedback of how to invest your company’s money.

If I can understand the advantages of supporting children’s sport I could say it a vital thing in our days. Children should have fit body and be strong. Moreover, sports competitions are benefit from doing enjoyable physical activities and receiving cognitive awareness skills.

To summarize the opportunities of attending open-air concerts I would say these are great advantages for families and their children to spend time enjoying together. Spending time on fresh air is essential for health furthermore when it is mixed with creative programs like concerts that can give amazing feelings. It also builds close relationship between family members when they will have place on air for spending time on concerts.

I would like to advise you that your company should spend money to sponsor our community local teenager’s sports team. So, they are really needed in supporting with buying sports equipment and hire transport. I hope that this information will be of some assistance.

Yours sincerely,
Olga Choklia

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...information will be of some assistance. Yours sincerely, Olga Choklia
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 984.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4364640884 4.54256449028 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97826441263 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.696132596685 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1415617007 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4545454545 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4545454545 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277735798636 0.216113520407 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866704161333 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631124966503 0.0603063233224 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147792365547 0.12726935374 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386333401228 0.0580467560999 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 8.71597938144 160% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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