A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the

Essay topics:

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter :

describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam,

Thank you for choosing our society for the donation. I am the general secretary of the society "Green View" and after organizing a few general meeting with our owners and tenants, I think you should aid our local cricket team for two years. I am writing this letter to tell you about why I need you to sponsor our sport club.

Firstly, our society has enormous number of families wherein the numbers of children are gigantic and have shown high interest in participating all the contest campaigned by our club member. There are some scholars who plays cricket at state level but due to insufficient funds we are unable to provide them equipments and training. On the other hand, the number of youngster are rapidly increasing in our vicinity, and hence if we organize the concerts near our residence it will help our local vendor to ameliorate their economic standards and support them to gain popularity among other society.

How soon will be you releasing the funds? And, Who will be responsible to manage these changes for such a long time. I would be attaching the list of sports we assist in playing.

I am waiting to hearing from you soon.

Your's Faithfully,
Apoorva Chikara

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 12, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n. Yours Faithfully, Apoorva Chikara
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, i think, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87559808612 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57980385419 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66985645933 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 308.7 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0601720961 44.8134815571 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6363636364 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141399506995 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532842613322 0.0766984524023 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539162055424 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0756952449245 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070493005032 0.0580467560999 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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