A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
• describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
• summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
• say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing with regards to the money that your company decided to allocate for local children. It seems that there are two different plan: being sponsor a sport teams and being sponsor for two open-air concerts. I think the first option is more appropriate because of a couple or reasons.
First of all, it is obvious that doing sport have several positive effect on health situation, especially for children. Also, engaging in such activities can encourage children to care about their health and promote their lifestyle. Another advantage is related to promotion the cooperation aspiration among peers.
On the other hand, despite the fact that holding concerts can be very exciting and entertaining, but it is true to say it has a short-time influence. I mean, may childeran and other oudiances experience an enjoyable time, but after concert, their attitude would not change significantly.
At the end, I believe supporting active and beneficial activities such as sport would bring a new set of positive consequences rather than holding a concert. In fact, the advantage of engaging in sport team outweigh the benefits of attending in a concert.
Yours sincerely,
Yalda asgrai.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'plans'?
Suggestion: plans
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Line 2, column 136, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'plan' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'plans'.
Suggestion: plans
.... It seems that there are two different plan: being sponsor a sport teams and being ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, i mean, i think, in fact, such as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 196.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22448979592 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74165738677 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81673318567 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.668367346939 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 290.88556701 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3645983511 44.8134815571 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0909090909 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.90909090909 4.34317383033 228% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230872631329 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777715735425 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10636252397 0.0603063233224 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130997347747 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150443858931 0.0580467560999 259% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 8.71597938144 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.