A large company in your area has decided to spend money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the company. In your let

Essay topics:

A large company in your area has decided to spend money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team

Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

Say how you tho the company should spend the money

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing to thank you for your kind attention to our society. Through this letter, I will accentuate the advantages on behalf of the general public for both alternatives.

In our area sports team of local children is run by the NGO that provide the basic facilities to carry out sports activities. Sponsorship for local children will bring enormous benefits for our team as well as for our country as it will help to fulfil the dreams of children to participate in sports at the international level which would be quite impossible due to shortage of funds and also motivate others to provide regular funds to NGO.

Secondly, opening open air concert is also a good idea as it will help to explore the talent of people and provide them with several opportunities. Besides this, the popularity of area through live concert would lead to huge benefits.

As per the overall society's perspective, it would be better to spend money on open area concerts as it is open to all age group and provide opportunities to the maximum people.

I am extremely grateful for your consideration.

Yours faithfully

Herry

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam, I am writing to thank you for your kind ...
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Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...entuate the advantages on behalf of the general public for both alternatives. In our area...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, second, secondly, so, well, as for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 961.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95360824742 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79963349559 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60824742268 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.5757062919 44.8134815571 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.777777778 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 16.8248392259 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 4.34317383033 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284058639714 0.216113520407 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11423226982 0.0766984524023 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500288669062 0.0603063233224 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146607125118 0.12726935374 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609393057431 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 8.37731958763 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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