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A motorway is to be built near your house.as you think that will destroy areas of natural beauty,Write a letter to the local authorities.in your letterExpress your views Explaine what damage will be caused Suggest alternative routes

Essay topics: A motorway is to be built near your house.as you think that will destroy areas of natural beauty,

Write a letter to the local authorities.in your letter

Express your views

Explaine what damage will be caused

Suggest alternative routes

kaveh1356's picture

Dear sir/madam

I am one of the dwellers lives in oak street. It’s such a convenient neighbourhood that has made it distinguished and famous because of its peace and safety. However we have realized recently that government is going to build a motorway to join it to Pars highway to offer residents ease approach to city centre. I am seriously on about that.

This project will spoil the great landscape of our area. Because this new motorway is going to be built in the Green park's restriction.which means we will lose our park. After that it is too close to residential area.therefore lots of people especially children and elderly who are vulnerable will suffer from hustle and bustle of new road.

I suggest this motor way may built-in another direction which is far from building for instance industrial areas which are obviously more in need to join to city centre and less valuable carbon sinks would be logged.

yours sincerly

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... dwellers lives in oak street. It's such a convenient neighbourhood that has...
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Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...famous because of its peace and safety. However we have realized recently that governme...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... spoil the great landscape of our area. Because this new motorway is going to be built...
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Line 5, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the great landscape of our area. Because this new motorway is going to be built i...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... children and elderly who are vulnerable will suffer from hustle and bustle of ne...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
...aluable carbon sinks would be logged. yours sincerly
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, may, therefore, well, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 788.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 160.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.925 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81336097933 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.70625 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.613571177 44.8134815571 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5 76.5299724578 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 4.34317383033 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154188543965 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633513422282 0.0766984524023 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654272759635 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0758913100838 0.12726935374 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519659054742 0.0580467560999 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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