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You have a full-time job and are also a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. in your letter Describe the situationExplain why you can not continue at this timeSay what action you w

Essay topics: You have a full-time job and are also a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. in your letter

Describe the situation

Explain why you can not continue at this time

Say what action you would like to take

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Dear sir/madam

I am one of the students in your evening tuition. Hence I am an employee in hospital and some alters have been carried out in my routine schedule, I have to cancel my favorite class in English formal writing.

In recent alternation some of our colleague due to lack of labor force are transferring to another unit, therefore some of us are undertaken more responsibilities to cover the vacancies that made in this way.

I am optimistic about the strategies our management is going to apply for this problem by the next month, therefore, All of colleagues and I will be able to turn to our past usual time-table, and I would come back to embark and continue my course, Since I have learnt a lot in your fruitful course, I eagerly willing to have this term off.

I am a student in your eve-course, however because of some events I had to take a term off , I would be delightful if you let me know about your permission for that. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Sahar

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...f the students in your evening tuition. Hence I am an employee in hospital and some a...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion some of our colleague due to lack of labor force are transferring to another...
^^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ur colleague due to lack of labor force are transferring to another unit, theref...
^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...therefore some of us are undertaken more responsibilities to cover the vacancies ...
^^
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... of some events I had to take a term off , I would be delightful if you let me kno...
^^
Line 9, column 167, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...me know about your permission for that. I look forward to hearing from you. You...
^
Line 11, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Sahar
^^^^
Line 13, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g from you. Yours faithfully, Sahar
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 836.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 183.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56830601093 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78103194967 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644808743169 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.531125163 44.8134815571 231% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 119.428571429 76.5299724578 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 16.8248392259 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180925382388 0.216113520407 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791831642238 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573443505878 0.0603063233224 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937550477796 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685443668261 0.0580467560999 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 8.37731958763 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 70.7449484536 76% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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