There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company, Describe1. What the problems are?2. Explain how these problems are affecting you3. What

Essay topics:

There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company, Describe

1. What the problems are?

2. Explain how these problems are affecting you

3. What would you like the company do?

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a pass holder passenger of your bus company and a Platinum bus club member. I am writing to complain about the bus which I take daily from sector 17 to Zirakpur.

The bus I take having a route number 212. Not only, the bus is always late in the morning by 15 minute but also in evening it is full of crowd. Therefore, some people complaint about the loss of their valuable items.

These problems are affecting my performance in the office. Because I always late for office and my boss humiliate me in front of the all my colleagues. As I cannot focus on my work and it may affects my career. Moreover, someone snitches my vault in the bus in evening and I lost my documents and also some cash.

If you allow me then I would like to give some solutions. Could you please install GPS system in all your buses to track the location? If you do so then, driver definitely follow their time tables accordingly. Further, CCTV cameras are helpful the find the person who snitches the personal belongings. I would like to request and immediate action for these problems.

I look forward to your prompt action.

Yours sincerely,

Amanpreet Kaur

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t my documents and also some cash. If you allow me then I would like to give ...
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Line 15, column 282, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'belongings'.
Suggestion: belongings
...ul the find the person who snitches the personal belongings. I would like to request and immediate ...
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Line 23, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion. Yours sincerely, Amanpreet Kaur
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64761904762 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50749443562 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633333333333 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.9142505005 44.8134815571 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.0 76.5299724578 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.125 16.8248392259 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159928996434 0.216113520407 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051422103861 0.0766984524023 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504988024611 0.0603063233224 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770152320524 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376380427062 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.8 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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