There have been some problems with the bus service especially its reliability in your area over the last two weeks Describe what the problms are Explain how these problems are affecting you Suggest what you would like the company to do

Essay topics:

There have been some problems with the bus service,especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks.

Describe what the problms are
Explain how these problems are affecting you
Suggest what you would like the company to do

Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to attract your attention on some problems which we are facing with your bus service. I, Kuldip Kumar, living in Ashok Vihar and using your bus services as main transportation but since last fortnight, we are not able to reach our destination in a timely manner. It is because buses are not arriving as per the schedule and it is happening very frequently which is impacting our personal and profession life.

I am using your bus service to commute to my office and to return back. On our office location, bus is the only feasibile and cost-effective mode of transportation. If buses do not arrive on-time, we will be late to office always and this causes negetive impact on my professional life and my work productivity.

I would like to give some recommendations to resolve delay service of the bus. Firstly, there is a need to increase the number of buses on our route, so we can board any bus as per the schedule or even before that time and reach our destination as per our routine. Secondly, you should give the time management training to drivers and conductors. Also, ask them to do proper time to time maintenance of vehicles to avoid any break down during the journey.

Awaiting for a positive response.

Your faithfully,
Kuldip

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to attract your attention on some ...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to attract your attention on some problems ...
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...we are not able to reach our destination in a timely manner. It is because buses ...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a timely manner" with adverb for "timely"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... are not able to reach our destination in a timely manner. It is because buses are not arriving a...
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Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... service to commute to my office and to return back. On our office location, bus is the onl...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: AWAITING_FOR[1]
Message: Did you mean 'awaiting' or 'waiting for'?
Suggestion: Awaiting; Waiting for
...d any break down during the journey. Awaiting for a positive response. Your faithfully...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1065.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75446428571 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83672601936 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598214285714 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 348.3 290.88556701 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6132262831 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.75 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152046720806 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608900726662 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638377917558 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771083387788 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574396035891 0.0580467560999 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 41.2886597938 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.