TPO-50

Essay topics:

TPO-50

The reading explains three problems related to the plan of sending humans to Mars, while the professor rejects the reading's problems and provides three solutions as follows.
Firstly, the reading claims that due to the long distance between Mars and Earth, accounting for at least two years, a plenty of food and water should be provided for astronauts, while the cargo capacity of space vehicles is too limit. In contrast, the professor points out that the astronauts can use hydro plants which can be grown just in the water. Not only this plant can provide sufficient food for astronauts, but also transmit CO2 to O2 which provides astronauts with fresh air. Furthermore, the water which is used for this plants can be recycled several time and used as a clean water.
Secondly, the reading claims that astronauts on the Mars are in the hazardous circumstances due to zero-gravity. While the professor reckons that several stations are developed for astronauts to have appropriate exercise in the zero-gravity. In addition, they regularly consume some nutrition foods such as vitamin to cope with the problem of bone density in zero-gravity.
Eventually, the reading claims that astronauts on Mars would be exposed to dangerous level of space radiation. While the professor affirms that they are equipped with special shielded area to safe themselves on the Mon. Moreover, all the time the radiation of sun is not dangerous.

Votes
Average: 1.6 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 226, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to limit'?
Suggestion: to limit
...the cargo capacity of space vehicles is too limit. In contrast, the professor points out ...
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Line 2, column 230, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'limited'.
Suggestion: limited
...cargo capacity of space vehicles is too limit. In contrast, the professor points out ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 528, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...urthermore, the water which is used for this plants can be recycled several time and...
^^^^
Line 2, column 556, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'several times'.
Suggestion: several times
...is used for this plants can be recycled several time and used as a clean water. Secondly, t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 581, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'clean water'.
Suggestion: clean water
...an be recycled several time and used as a clean water. Secondly, the reading claims that ast...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to dangerous level of space radiation. While the professor affirms that they are equ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, at least, in addition, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 32.9175257732 33% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1200.0 937.175257732 128% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15021459227 4.54256449028 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76386185986 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549356223176 0.622605031667 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 360.0 290.88556701 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 7.0 0.824742268041 849% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.1175058321 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.090909091 76.5299724578 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1818181818 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0909090909 4.34317383033 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.216113520407 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0766984524023 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0603063233224 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.12726935374 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0580467560999 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 8.37731958763 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 8.71597938144 144% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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