Write to college accomodation officer for renting room in your apartment.Tell where is your apartmentDescribe your roomWhat kind of person you prefer

Essay topics:

Write to college accomodation officer for renting room in your apartment.
Tell where is your apartment
Describe your room
What kind of person you prefer

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to seek your assistance in regards of renting my available room in the apartment.

As my apartment is quite near to your college. It's exactly apposite to Dalla Cafe in the main hub of busy town on the opposite road of college. It might be of interest to some students interested to stay near college and want to avoid traveling cost.

Further, room is very big with built in cupboard and mounted curtains. Walls lights are installed as well other facilities wi-fi, fridge, washing machine, microwave and land-line telephone is available as well. A separate bathroom is available also.

I will prefer a mature person who is having less visitors. Responsible for keeping his room and toilet clean.

I will look forward to hear from you.

Your faithfully.
Linda Joy

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
... I am writing to seek your assistance in regards of renting my available room in the apartm...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...my available room in the apartment. As my apartment is quite near to your coll...
^^
Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... well. A separate bathroom is available also. I will prefer a mature person who ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 45, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun visitors is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ll prefer a mature person who is having less visitors. Responsible for keeping his r...
^^^^
Line 11, column 21, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...d toilet clean. I will look forward to hear from you. Your faithfully. Linda ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 32.9175257732 36% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 685.0 937.175257732 73% => OK
No of words: 137.0 206.0 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.42121322205 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60617675545 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 127.690721649 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.737226277372 0.622605031667 118% => OK
syllable_count: 207.9 290.88556701 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1885577121 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.5 76.5299724578 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7 16.8248392259 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233032144666 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0771305129106 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908894487015 0.0603063233224 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106994856634 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933164245382 0.0580467560999 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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