Write a letter to a college Principal, where you attended a one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted. -Explain what was the type of the course-What happened and what can be done to make sure this problem never occurs again.

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a college Principal, where you attended a one day computer course and are unhappy about the way it was conducted.

-Explain what was the type of the course
-What happened and what can be done to make sure this problem never occurs again.

Dear Sir,
I participated in a one-day computer course, held in your department last week. Now, I am writing this letter to inform you about some of the demerits associated with the course.
The course was held on October 12th between 8:00 am and 5:00 pm, and it was taught thoroughly by Mr. Brown. The main purpose of the course was to address the issues regarding designing pictures through Photoshop software.
Personally, I feel dissatisfied with regard to two factors. The first one was the low temperature of the class, where we were trained. I guess there seemed to be some malfunctions in the building heating system, which resulted in a decline in our concentration on the teaching material, owing to the cold weather; therefore, it appears to be a practical idea to check the heating system every week in order to prevent such problems. The second problematic issue was about the computers used. A number of them were crashed and out of work, so we had to share the remaining ones to do our tasks in the class, which, however, brought about lots of distractions among the participants. In my view, having some stronger anti-virus applications would be of great help to protect the systems and cause them to work properly.
I hope you put my recommendations into consideration so as to have more profitable courses in your faculty.
All the Best
Aila Salehi

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...writing this letter to inform you about some of the demerits associated with the course. ...
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Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...t my recommendations into consideration so as to have more profitable courses in your fa...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...your faculty. All the Best Aila Salehi
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, regarding, second, so, therefore, as to, i feel, i guess, in my view, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 26.3917525773 159% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1163.0 937.175257732 124% => OK
No of words: 235.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94893617021 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85999237068 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655319148936 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 290.88556701 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.4630408874 44.8134815571 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9166666667 76.5299724578 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 4.34317383033 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190927582815 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659673860163 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047388551254 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739925924317 0.12726935374 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587750739087 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 41.2886597938 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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