Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Over the past several years sports champions income has steadily increased. although one school of thought believes that athletic icons earn a formidable fortune they do not deserve, I disagree with this idea. Analysing the influence of these people on the society and the effort that have made to achieve their goals will justify my perspective.
Firstly, sports champions, as a paragon for several others, inspire youngsters to embark on fruitful activities and avoid bad habits including addiction. For example, Bruce Lee, a great martial artist and movie star, motivated numerous<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="a "></span> individuals to take up practising sports such as Kung Fu. A considerable number of people in remote places of the world know him and try to follow his lead even after his death. His influence at a global scale should be admired and assumed unvaluable.
Secondly, to become internationally or even nationally recognised and cherished requires years of hard work and practice alongside an abstinent lifestyle which should be valued. Take Michael Phelps as an example: he spent two decades of training while on serious diets which cannot be put up with by a great majority of other athletics. any job or profession with this degree of effort has to be tremendously rewarded by society to be appealing enough.
By contrast, there are some argues against the necessity of high payment to athletic icons. The most notable and widely accepted is that the money which is given to these athletes ought to be spent in other ways to mitigate poverty. although this opinion sounds convincing, it should be considered that a significant proportion of any country's income is spent on warfare and defence budget which might eventually result in the massacre of human being. So, to cut the budgets there is a true priority.
to conclude, 'the great deal' of money which is paid to famous athletics seems sensible and fair. The positive impact and persistence of these people have to be acknowledged by society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24924012158 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22921686725 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635258358663 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9676538835 49.4020404114 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.133333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140917211366 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431377872458 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330405562237 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793569588098 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298823357485 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.